prosze o sprawdzenie

19.04.08, 08:43
Bardzo proszę o sprawdzenie czy poprawnie stosuje czasy i czy nie ma błędów.
Z góry dzieki;)

When I was a little girl I went with my parents at the sea. Every day we were
going to swim and sunbathe. I couldn't swim and my father decided to teache
me. I was very happy because I had an own lifebelt.
One day I wanted to try swimming without the lifebelt. The sea was cold but
very calm. My first time was good. I was swiming all day when unexpectedly
appeared some very large waves. I drowned and I called for help. My father
swam to me but the waves were stronger and bigger.
At some time I disappeared under the water and I couldn't surface. I was
terrified. The water flowed to my ears. I didn't see anything and I drank a
lot of water.
Suddenly I was feeling how somebody pulled out me. It was my father. He helped
me to swam to the seashore.
I don't remember that accident because it was terrible for me. For thet time I
scare swimming while on the sea there are waves.
    • tasma_izolacyjna Re: prosze o sprawdzenie 19.04.08, 23:41
      When I was a little girl I went to the seaside with my parents.
      Every day we went swimming and sunbathing. I couldn't swim and my
      father decided to teach me. I was very happy because I had my own
      lifebelt. One day I wanted to try swimming without the lifebelt. The
      sea was cold but very calm. My first time was good. I was swimming
      all day when unexpectedly some very large waves appeared. I was
      drowning and calling for help. My father was swimming towards me but
      the waves were stronger and bigger. At some time I disappeared under
      the water and I couldn't come to the surface. I was terrified. The
      water flowed into my ears. I didn't see anything and I drank a lot
      of water.
      Suddenly I felt somebody pulling me out. It was my father. He helped
      me to swim to the seashore.
      I don't remember that accident because it was terrible for me. Since
      then I have been scared of swimming in the sea when there are waves.
      • asiara74 Re: prosze o sprawdzenie 20.04.08, 19:25
        At some time zastąpiłabym suddenly
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