Can you check it for me, please?

IP: *.internetdsl.tpnet.pl 21.05.08, 18:51
I've just translated contents of my MA thesis, but I'm afraid I could do some
mistakes. The thesis is related with economics and it was really hard to find
all the vocabulary in the dictionaries.
I'm not sure if I have to put "the" in some places.
I'm not sure how to translated the title of the thesis ("KOSZ" is the example
of the sports organization): "The financial analysis of sports organizations
in the example of sports club “KOSZ”" Is it correct? I'm afraid not.
The first page look like that:

Wroclaw University of Economics
The Faculty of Computer Science and Finance

The financial analysis of sports organizations in the example of sports club
“KOSZ”

the master’s thesis

The Financial Accounting and Control Department

Thesis supervisor
Dr …………………..

Is it ok?

And my contents:

Contents
Introduction

The 1st chapter

Organizational and legal aspects of sports organizations functioning

1.1 Legal basis of sports organizations activities
1.2 Forms of functioning, classifications of sports organizations
1.3 Sports club, principles of its activities

The 2nd chapter
Essence and range of financial analysis

2.1 Genesis of financial analysis
2.2 Scale and purposes of financial analysis
2.3 Subject and sorts of analysis, methods of comparison
2.4 Company and its surroundings /enclosing

The 3rd chapter

Analysis of companies’ financial status

3.1 Role and importance of financial reports
3.2 Balance
3.3 Profit and loss account
3.4 Cash flow
3.5 Additional information

The 4th chapter

Assessment criteria of business entity situation

4.1 Ratio analysis
4.2 Criterion of profitability
4.3 Criterion of liquidity
4.4 Criterion of efficient management
5.5 Valuation of debt

The 5th chapter

Assessment of sports clubs’ financial condition

5.1 Characteristic of sports club “Kosz”
5.2 The factors determining functioning of described business entity / or
Conditionality of described business entity functioning
5.3 Analysis of financial reports
5.4 Ratio analysis
5.5 Ratio assessment – Du Pont model
5.6 Summary

Literature
List of appendices
List of tables
List of drawings


I have no one who could check it for me, before I give it to my thesis
supervisor. Can you do it for me, please?
Thank you in advance
    • jonathan.oakley Re: Can you check it for me, please? 22.05.08, 00:22
      My pleasure..pls have a look below
      The financial analysis of sports organizations using sports club
      “KOSZ” as an example.

      the master’s thesis

      The Financial Accounting and Control Department

      Thesis supervisor
      Dr …………………..

      Is it ok?

      And my contents:

      Contents
      Introduction

      The 1st chapter

      Organizational and Legal Aspects of Sports Organizations

      1.1 Legal basis of sports organizations' activities
      1.2 Forms of functioning, classifications of sports organizations
      1.3 Sports club - principle activities

      The 2nd chapter
      Essence and range of financial analysis

      2.1 Genesis of financial analysis
      2.2 Scale and purposes of financial analysis
      2.3 Subject and sorts of analysis, methods of comparison
      2.4 Company and its surroundings

      The 3rd chapter

      Analysis of companies’ financial status

      3.1 Role and importance of financial reports
      3.2 Balance
      3.3 Profit and loss account
      3.4 Cash flow
      3.5 Additional information

      The 4th chapter

      Assessment criteria of business entity

      4.1 Ratio analysis
      4.2 Criterion of profitability
      4.3 Criterion of liquidity
      4.4 Criterion of efficient management
      5.5 Valuation of debt

      The 5th chapter

      Assessment of sports clubs’ financial condition

      5.1 Characteristics of sports club “Kosz”
      5.2 The factors determining functioning of described business
      entity / or
      Conditionality of described business entity
      5.3 Analysis of financial reports
      5.4 Ratio analysis
      5.5 Ratio assessment – Du Pont model
      5.6 Summary

      Literature
      List of appendices
      List of tables
      List of drawings
      • katia8 Re: Can you check it for me, please? 22.05.08, 11:50
        Thank you so much for helping me :)
        You are so kind that I have more questions.

        1) Which is correct?:
        The Faculty of Computer Science and Finance
        or
        The Computer Science and Finance Faculty

        2) I don't have to use "the" in the titles of chapters. Am I right?
        "Subject and sorts of analysis" not "The subject and sorts of analysis" or maybe
        both are correct?

        3) Do you know any economic dictionaries online? (the best would be
        Polish-English :) )

        with best regards Aga
        • jonathan.oakley Re: Can you check it for me, please? 22.05.08, 12:37
          This is correct:
          1) Which is correct?:
          > The Faculty of Computer Science and Finance
          This is correct:

          2) I don't have to use "the" in the titles of chapters. Am I right?
          > "Subject and sorts of analysis"
          This link may be helpful:
          www.utoronto.ca/writing/articles.html
          Good luck!

          • katia8 Re: Can you check it for me, please? 22.05.08, 14:13
            Thanks again :)
      • jacinda Re: Can you check it for me, please? 22.05.08, 11:55
        My comments in square brackets.


        "My pleasure..pls have a look below
        The financial analysis of sports organizations using sports club
        “KOSZ” as an example.

        the [Delete 'the' - no need for an article here] Master’s thesis

        The Financial Accounting and Control Department

        Thesis supervisor [Written under the supervision of...]
        Dr ………………….. [Name Surname, PhD]

        Is it ok?

        And my contents:

        Contents
        Introduction

        The 1st chapter

        Organizational and Legal Aspects of Sports Organizations

        1.1 Legal basis of sports organizations' activities
        1.2 Forms of functioning, classifications of sports organizations
        1.3 Sports club [Shouldn't it be 'clubs'?]- principle activities

        The 2nd chapter
        Essence and range of financial analysis [do you want this plural or
        singular? analyses is plural; if you want it in singular 'analysis',
        then you need an article 'a' before 'financial analysis]

        2.1 Genesis of financial analysis [same as above, either change to
        analyses or 'a financial analysis'. Add also 'The' before 'genesis]
        2.2 Scale and purposes of financial analysis [same as above]
        2.3 Subject and sorts of analysis [types of analyses - plural here],
        methods of comparison
        2.4 Company and its surroundings

        The 3rd chapter

        Analysis of companies’ financial status
        3.1 Role and importance of financial reports
        3.2 Balance
        3.3 Profit and loss account
        3.4 Cash flow
        3.5 Additional information

        The 4th chapter

        Assessment criteria of business entity

        4.1 Ratio analysis
        4.2 Criterion of profitability
        4.3 Criterion of liquidity
        4.4 Criterion of efficient management
        5.5 Valuation of debt

        The 5th chapter

        Assessment of sports clubs’ financial condition [Are you talking
        about KOSZ now? It's just one club, so should be The assessment of a
        sports club's financial condition]
        5.1 Characteristics of sports club “Kosz”
        5.2 The factors determining functioning of described business
        entity / or
        Conditionality of described business entity
        5.3 Analysis of financial reports
        5.4 Ratio analysis
        5.5 Ratio assessment – Du Pont model
        5.6 Summary

        Literature
        List of appendices
        List of tables
        List of drawings"
        • jonathan.oakley Re: Can you check it for me, please? 22.05.08, 12:32
          To decide if you should use the word 'the' you have to ask yourself
          if the noun is specfic or non-specfic...I have kept my advice simple
          and tried not to bog you down in the use of the definte articule!!

          Pls check the links below for online economic online dictionaries:
          www.thefreedictionary.com/economics
          www.dictionaryofeconomics.com/dictionary
          • Gość: polishhamster Re: Can you check it for me, please? IP: *.chello.pl 22.05.08, 15:17
            very good, jonathan...now be prepared for every tom, dick and harry to send you
            a thousand pages of text to check for free...;)
            • Gość: Maggie Re: Can you check it for me, please? IP: *.internetdsl.tpnet.pl 22.05.08, 15:23
              not everyone do everything for profits
              like you do
              I suppose
              • Gość: polishhamster Re: Can you check it for me, please? IP: 62.69.217.* 26.05.08, 12:15
                well you suppose wrong.
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