Opowiadanie. Moglibyscie sprawdzic? :)

11.03.09, 18:25

Prosze o pomoc, gdyz nie wiem w niektorych miejscach jakich zwrotow uzyc no
i.. mam troche za duzo slow a nie wiem jak mozna to skrocic zeby mialo sens. :)



"Lost and Found"

It was a hot and sunny day. Me and my brother Kyle decided to go on a trip
to Afrika. We were very curious of aligator's being in their natural
conditions. We packed and set off.

When we finally reached to the planned place, Kyle said that there were no
use waiting and we started looking for aligators. Walking through bushes were
really tiring, but big excitement DAŁ NAM SIŁY DO DZIAŁANIA.

All of a sudden we saw a huge, yellow teeth near my arm. "Dont move! It
may hurt you!", my brother ordered. Unfortunately it fancied my palm and bit
my fingers. I was very lucky, because I didn't get injured. After a moment
Kyle asked: "Where is your ring, sister?". I couldn't believe my eyes. The
animal started choking and after a few minutes collapsed without OZNAK ZYCIA.

Then I found a very sharp stone and I started to cut aligator's stomach.
Disgusting sound came to our ears. I felt very horrible, but there were no
other way to get back my precious- my family keepsake.It took one hour to
find it but it was worth it. "Oh, I'm so exhausted, I can already see the
sunset in the sky. Let's come home." , I finally said.

In the end we came to hotel and phoned my mother to tell what happened. She
was glad that we are alife, but also that I still have this beautiful ring
with a grin gem.


Prosze o odpowiedz :):)
    • paznokiec2 Re: Opowiadanie. Moglibyscie sprawdzic? :) 11.03.09, 20:40
      proszę, odpowiedzcie
    • smutas Re: Opowiadanie. Moglibyscie sprawdzic? :) 11.03.09, 21:21
      (...) strted to look for alligators(...)

      big excitement gave us nice boost to carry on.

      (...) started to choke (...)

      collapsed / without any signs of life / and dropped stone dead

      ? ...ring with a grin gem. Czy masz pierscionek z rozesmianym kamieniem? Czy
      moze on jest poprostu "green" :-)
      • paznokiec2 Re: Opowiadanie. Moglibyscie sprawdzic? :) 11.03.09, 21:46
        hehe dziekuje bardzo :) oczywiscie green, nie wiem czemu tak napisalam :D

        dzieki :-)
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