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[aniax1231]

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I think that computer is obviously a great invention, but
it is got also some bad points.
Firstly computer is our window to the world. Thanks to it
we have access to news without leaving our houses. Secondly it is
very helpful for example when students have to do their homework,
they con find information on the internet very quickly. It also
helps pupils to revise for tests or exams. They can learn foreign
laguages on the internet too. Moreover we can meet new people,
places and talk with our griends even if they are very far away from
us. Computer is also a great entertaiment. For relax we can listen
to music, play computer games and watch films. Thanks to the
computer we are able to do shopping without leaving our houses.
But on the other hand computers cause deterioration of
vision.Moreover children don’t spend their free time with their
family or friends, because they waste their time during playing
computer games.They also use the internet to watch films or photos
for adults. What’s more I think that computers are too expensive and
not all can buy them.
Summing up in my opinion computer has much more benefits
than drawbacks. I also can say that I am follower of this invention.

[zdzicha]

No dobrze. Jest parę błędów, ale widać, że się przyłożyłaś i wiesz o czym piszesz.

[nobullshit]

Tak z grubsza:

I think that computer is obviously a great invention, but
it also has got some bad points.
Firstly, computer is our window to the world. Thanks to it
we have access to news without leaving our houses. Secondly, it is
very helpful for example when students have to do their homework,
they can find information on the internet very quickly. It also helps
pupils to revise for tests or exams. They can learn foreign laguages on the
internet too. Moreover we can meet new people, see new (? brakuje jakiegoś
czasownika) places and talk with our friends even if they are very
far away from us. Computer is also a great entertaiment. For relax we can listen
to music, play computer games and watch films. Thanks to the
computer we are able to do shopping without leaving our houses.
But on the other hand computers cause deterioration of
vision. Moreover children don’t spend their free time with their
family or friends, because they waste their time (during)- niepotrzebne
playing
computer games. They also use the internet to watch films or photos
for adults. What’s more I think that computers are too expensive and
not all can buy them. - lepiej: not everybody can afford them.
Summing up, in my opinion computer has much more benefits
than drawbacks. I also can say that I am a follower of this invention.