Could you check ........................

[d0minika]

It is part of short story. Could you check it?

NIE BIORĘ ODPOWIEDZIALNOŚCI ZA ZGONY WYWOŁANE WIDOKIEM MOICH BŁĘDÓW (I had
to write that in polish - really important things should be known)


During cold, windy day, when cats are really loved by lonely people and
fireplace is our first wish to golden fish, in that day Mila refused Mr K.
Actually, it's too little saing only: "refused".While this story began, she
was screaming, beating, crying and breaking everything what she touched.
Maybe, if she hadn't drunk so much coffe that day, she would have spent the
rest of autumn lonely, but quietly in her own house. But most probably is
that, she could not drink coffe, not go out, not stand up bed, more! - she
could go under her old sofa, put hands on ears and started to pretend dog's
pillow, full of louses, and this story would be started. She haven't do
that. She drunk coffe, murdered in mind fifty seventh post man, brushed
teeth like each weekend and went out.

You are still living!!! Are you sure you're oh right?

[nowamloda]

d0minika napisała:

> It is part of short story. Could you check it?
>
> NIE BIORĘ ODPOWIEDZIALNOŚCI ZA ZGONY WYWOŁANE WIDOKIEM MOICH BŁĘDÓW (I had
> to write that in polish - really important things should be known)
>
>
> On a cold, windy day, when lonely people really love their cats and
> fireplace is our first wish for golden fish, on such a day Mila rejected Mr
K.
> Actually, it is not enough to say: "rejected".When this story began, she
> was screaming, beating, crying and breaking everything in her reach.
> Maybe, if she had not had so much coffe this day, she would have spent the
> rest of the autumn lonely, but quietly at her home. But it is more likely
that she would not be able to drink coffe or go out or get out of her bed.
Further - she would crawl under her old sofa, cover her ears with hands and
start pretending a dog's pillow, full of lice, and this story would start. She
has not done it. She had her coffee, murdered the fifty seventh post man in her
head, brushed her teeth like every weekend and went out.
>
I am not sure I got it all, but maybe someone else has the patience.

[nowamloda]

P.S. coffee not coffe

[d0minika]

wielkie dzięki
jezuuu jestem beznadziejna..............

[nowamloda]

Tak zle to nie jest, ale w angileskim nie da sie pominac artikli, tak jak w
polskim nie da sie zignorowac przypadkow. Strona czynna jest zawsze milej
widziana niz bierna. Jak bedziesz o tym pamietac, to bedzie OK.

[d0minika]

a mówią, że angielski łatwym językiem jest... jeszcze raz wielkie dzięki