Could you help me?

[Gość: d0minika]

Could you check it? It's about Summer Palac in China. I will be really
graceful.

The Summer Palace in Bejing is a huge area of typical china gardens -
beatifull, naturals but man-made. It was built in honour of old empresses.
It's cover 800 acres, including huge lake - K'unming Lake, which take 3/4 of
area of Summer Palace. Beside the gardens, there are pavilions, pagodas,
towers and bridges. They were added to Summer Palace about the 17th century.
Royal gardens was begun in the 13th century. Magnificient monument was used
by emerors and empresses. They hunted, rested and enjoyed there.
Unfortunately the Palace was destroyed by soldiers in 1860, later it was
rebuilt, but in 1900 it was destroyed again. The monument, which we look now
is only small part of earlier Summer Palace. Turists in Palace can see
antiques and treasures of China. The most beatifull monuments in gardens are
marble Seventeen - Arch Bridge, Suzhon Market Street and Long Corridor.

[el_presidente666]

Gość portalu: d0minika napisał(a):

> Could you check it? It's about Summer Palac in China. I will be really
> graceful.

You meant grateful, perhaps :)

> The Summer Palace in Bejing is a huge area of typical china gardens -

Beijing

Chinese

> beatifull, naturals but man-made. It was built in honour of old empresses.

beautiful, natural, but...
past (ancient?) empresses
old empresses = elderly empresses - this isn't what you meant, I suppose

> It's cover 800 acres, including huge lake - K'unming Lake, which take 3/4 of

It covers...
It has the area of...
Its area is...

a huge lake
the K'something Lake
which takes

> area of Summer Palace. Beside the gardens, there are pavilions, pagodas,

the area of the...
Besides the gardens, what can also be found in the Palace are blablabla...

> towers and bridges. They were added to Summer Palace about the 17th century.

added -> built
in the 17th century

> Royal gardens was begun in the 13th century. Magnificient monument was used

were established/founded/built/created. The..

> by emerors and empresses. They hunted, rested and enjoyed there.

emperors [a typo perhaps]
their enjoyable life there consisted of hunting and relaxation

> Unfortunately the Palace was destroyed by soldiers in 1860, later it was

Unfortunately,
by soldiers -> during the 1st Opium War [from grammar point of view, it's
correct, but it should at least say what soldiers]

. It was rebuilt soon only to be destroyed again in 1900s.

> rebuilt, but in 1900 it was destroyed again. The monument, which we look now

[or possibly this way:] The Palace suffered severe damage during the Opium Wars...

The monument _that_ we see now

> is only small part of earlier Summer Palace. Turists in Palace can see

a small part of former

Tourists
[even betters:] Visitors to the Palace

> antiques and treasures of China. The most beatifull monuments in gardens are

some adjective missing here, e.g. "astonishing" :)
beautiful [again]

> marble Seventeen - Arch Bridge, Suzhon Market Street and Long Corridor.

made of marble: Seventeen ...

Check:
- defining/non-defining subordinate clauses (which or that?)
- remember about articles (the, a, an)
- past forms of 'be'

Plus mind your spelling and everything'll be alright :)

Regards.

[el_presidente666]

One more thing I haven't noticed:

royal = king's
imperial = emperor's

So it should say Imperial Gardens perhaps.

[ladyc]

Could you check it? It's about a Summer Palace in China. I will be really
grateful.

The Summer Palace in Bejing is a huge area of typical chinese gardens -
beautiful, natural but man-made. It was built in honour of old empresses.
It covers 800 acres, including a huge lake - K'unming Lake, which takes 3/4 of
area of Summer Palace. Beside the gardens, there are pavilions, pagodas,
towers and bridges. They were added to the Summer Palace in about the 17th
century.
The Royal gardens were begun in the 13th century. Magnificient monument was
used
by emerors and empresses. They hunted, rested and enjoyed themselves there.
Unfortunately the Palace was destroyed by soldiers in 1860. Later it was
rebuilt, but in 1900 it was destroyed again. The monument, which we see now
is only a small part of the earlier Summer Palace. Tourists visiting the
Palace can see
antiques and treasures of China. The most beautiful monuments in the gardens
are
a marble Seventeen - Arch Bridge, Suzhon Market Street and Long Corridor.

I made it more or less correct in English, but some parts are a little awkward.
ladyc

[Gość: d0minika]

fęk ju wery macz;)
I'm really dense.......