TRANSLATION TASK

[nyo]

Who'd like to have a go at translating this into Polish?

MADONNA - Like A Virgin
I made it through the wilderness
Somehow I made it through
Didn't know how lost I was
Until I found you
I was beat incomplete
I'd been had, I was sad and blue
But you made me feel
Yeah, you made me feel
Shiny and new

Chorus:
Like a virgin
Touched for the very first time
Like a virgin
When your heart beats (after first time, "With your heartbeat")
Next to mine

Gonna give you all my love, boy
My fear is fading fast
Been saving it all for you
'Cause only love can last
You're so fine and you're mine
Make me strong, yeah you make me bold
Oh your love thawed out
Yeah, your love thawed out
What was scared and cold

(chorus)

Oooh, oooh, oooh
You're so fine and you're mine
I'll be yours 'till the end of time
'Cause you made me feel
Yeah, you made me feel
I've nothing to hide

(chorus)

Like a virgin, ooh, ooh
Like a virgin
Feels so good inside
When you hold me, and your heart beats, and you love me
Oh, oh, oh, oh, oh, oh, oh, oh, oh
Ooh, baby
Can't you hear my heart beat
For the very first time?

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nyo napisał:

> Who'd like to have a go at translating this into Polish?
You mean translating properly or just have a laugh? Somehow the latter is more
appealing to me, so please don't take this translation too seriously (and sorry
for the lack of polish fonts)
>
> MADONNA - Like A Virgin
> I made it through the wilderness
Zrobilam to przez dzikosc
> Somehow I made it through
Jakos tak samo przez sie
> Didn't know how lost I was
Nie wiedzialam jak zgubiona bylam
> Until I found you
Poki cie nie odnalazlam
> I was beat incomplete
Bylam niekompletnie pobita (wydaje sie jakby bohaterka byla z tego powodu
niezadowolona, co napawa tlumacza lekkim niepokojem)
> I'd been had, I was sad and blue
Mialam cos, ale bylam smutna i niebieska (bohaterka najwyrazniej stosuje zabieg
znany juz od czasow Rimbauda - skojarzenie koloru z uczuciem)
> But you made me feel
Ale ty zrobile/as mnie czujaca
> Yeah, you made me feel
> Shiny and new
Nowa i swiecaca (byc moze autorka miala w zamysle zareklamowac zaklad oferujacy
naprawe sprzetu gospodarczego)

>
> Chorus:
> Like a virgin
Jak dziewica (to zapewne nazwa zakladu naprawczego)
> Touched for the very first time
Dotknieta po raz pierwszy (hmm... skoro sprzet nie byl nigdy wczesniej u
naprawy...)
> Like a virgin
{patrz wyzej}
> When your heart beats (after first time, "With your heartbeat")
> Next to mine
Kiedy twoje serce bije blisko mojego (personifikacja - nadanie przedmiotom cech
ludzkich)
>
> Gonna give you all my love, boy
Dam ci cala milosc, chlopcze (dalsza personifikacja - sprzet gospodarczy zostal
obdarzony glosem i zwraca sie do fachowca dokonujacego naprawy)
> My fear is fading fast
Moj strach wiednie szybko
> Been saving it all for you
Chociaz tak go zachowywalam dla ciebie (roslina o nazwie 'strach' ma zwyczaj
bardzo szybko wiednac jesli sie jej nie podlewa)
> 'Cause only love can last
Bo tylko milosc moze byc ostatnia (kto pozno przychodzi sam sobie szkodzi)
> You're so fine and you're mine
Jestes taki fajny i moj (pan fachowiec czerwieni sie od komplementow)
> Make me strong, yeah you make me bold
Uczyn mnie silna i lysa (co to za urzadzenie, ktore trzeba golic?)
> Oh your love thawed out
Och, twoja milosc roztopila (tlumaczowi przychodzi na mysl piec do wytopu
surowki)
> Yeah, your love thawed out
{patrz wyzej}
> What was scared and cold
Co bylo swiete i zimne (swieta zazwyczaj przypadaja w okresie zimowym wiec to
niby nic dziwnego)
>
> (chorus)
>
> Oooh, oooh, oooh
> You're so fine and you're mine
Jestes taki fajny i moj
> I'll be yours 'till the end of time
bede twoja do konca czasu (zapewne do momentu zjawienia sie wlasciciela po
odbior rzeczonego sprzetu)
> 'Cause you made me feel
Zrobiles mnie czujaca
> Yeah, you made me feel
> I've nothing to hide
Ze mam nic do ukrycia (totez nie powinno byc wiekszego problemu z ukryciem
owego nica - czyzby zdrada wisiala w powietrzu?)
>
> (chorus)
>
> Like a virgin, ooh, ooh
> Like a virgin
> Feels so good inside
Tak dobrze czuje sie w srodku (a jednak nie zdrada - po prosto urzadzenie
znalazlo sie juz we wnetrzu torby wlasciciela, ktory przyszedl odebrac swoja
wlasnosc z zakladu naprawczego o nazwie Dziewica)
> When you hold me, and your heart beats, and you love me
Kiedy mnie trzymasz i twoje serce bije i mnie kochasz (tak tak - sprzet
gospodarstwa domowego potrafi odplacic sie niezwykla wiernoscia jesli go
nalezycie traktowac)
> Oh, oh, oh, oh, oh, oh, oh, oh, oh
> Ooh, baby
> Can't you hear my heart beat
> For the very first time?
(a serduszko - czyli prawdopodobnie silnik- jest jak nowe)
>

That's it, folks.

[nyo]

FANTASTIC.

[Gość: Withnail]

nyo napisał:

> FANTASTIC.

Thank you very much, sir.

[Gość: together]

Fashizel Ma Nizel. You are such a shlamil and putz.
Well thawed noodles - dobrze odcedzony makaron.Nie roztopiony.
Oy way. I'm getting all fehrklempt. Shlamazel.

[Gość: eire]

> I'd been had, I was sad and blue
Mialam cos, ale bylam na i niebieska (bohaterka najwyrazniej stosuje zabieg
znany juz od czasow Rimbauda - skojarzenie koloru z uczuciem)

"I have been had" - zostalam wrobiona, zrobiona w konia, oszukana.There is such
an idiom :-

[Gość: rafi]

unfortunately i was reading your translation in a library and i got kicked out
coz of my laughing out loud. very loud :-)
i love your translation! youre the man!

Withnail can't translate

[Gość: together]

This is horrible atempt to translate
I made it through the wilderness
przeszlam przez haszcze not very fortunate the meaning is wild time
somehow I made it through
jakos mi sie udalo

withnail translates from dictionary. Has no idea about idioms.
I'll try to get you better one.

[Gość: Withnail]

Don't get so upset. Y'know, it's not good for your blood pressure and all the
people on this message board would miss you if you suddenly kicked the bucket
(as the Greeks would say).
It never meant to be a SERIOUS and accurate translation and I can proudly say
that I didn't check a single word in dictionary.

[Gość: rafi]

nie wiem czy zrozumiesz cokolwiek, bo - jak zauwazylem w twoim tlumaczeniu na
polski - chyba polski jest ci conajmniej obcy, ale w kazdym badz razie zycze ci
powodzenia! i jezeli tylko dasz mi swoj adres, to podesle ci slownik
ortograficzny. pewnie ci sie przyda!
hasta la vista

[Gość: together]

> MADONNA - Like A Virgin
Jak dziewica
> I made it through the wilderness
Przeszlam przez wir zycia
> Somehow I made it through
Jakos mi sie udalo
> Didn't know how lost I was
Nie wiedzialam, jak bylam zagubiona
> Until I found you
Dopuki nie znalazlam ciebie
> I was beat incomplete
Bylam prawie przegrana
> I'd been had, I was sad and blue
Oszukana, smutna i przygnebiona
> But you made me feel
Dzieki tobie poczulam sie
> Yeah, you made me feel
Tak, dzieki tobie poczulam sie
> Shiny and new
Radosna i jak nowa (swierza )

> Chorus:
> Like a virgin
Jak dziewica
> Touched for the very first time
Ten pierwszy raz wzruszona
> Like a virgin
Jak dziewica
> When your heart beats (after first time, "With your heartbeat")
Gdy twoje serce bije
> Next to mine
Obok mojego
> Gonna give you all my love, boy
Dam ci cala moja milosc, chlopcze
> My fear is fading fast
Moj strach szybko blednie
> Been saving it all for you
Trzymalam to wszystko dla ciebie
> 'Cause only love can last
Bo tylko milosc jest trwala
> You're so fine and you're mine
Jestes taki piekny i moj
> Make me strong, yeah you make me bold
Czynisz mnie silna, tak czynisz mnie odwazna
> Oh your love thawed out
Twoja milosc oczyscila
> Yeah, your love thawed out
Tak, twoja milosc oczyscila
> What was scared and cold
Mnie z obaw i zimna
> (chorus)
>
> Oooh, oooh, oooh
> You're so fine and you're mine
Jestes taki piekny i moj
> I'll be yours 'till the end of time
Bede twoja na zawsze
> 'Cause you made me feel
Poniewaz dzieki tobie poczulam
> Yeah, you made me feel
Tak, dzieki tobie poczulam
> I've nothing to hide
Ze nie mam nic do ukrycia
> (chorus)
>
> Like a virgin, ooh, ooh
Jak dziewica
> Like a virgin
Jak dziewica
> Feels so good inside
Tak cieplo w sercu
> When you hold me, and your heart beats, and you love me
Kiedy obejmujesz mnie i twoje serce bije i mnie kochasz
> Oh, oh, oh, oh, oh, oh, oh, oh, oh
> Ooh, baby
> Can't you hear my heart beat
Czy slyszysz jak bije moje serce
> For the very first time?
Ten pierwszy raz.



Well, I'm not a poet but I've done my best. At least you'll understand the
context of the song.

[nyo]

ALSO FANTASTIC.

Actually this translation business is bloody difficult!

[Gość: cc]

won't bother to read it out, yet hope your english doesn't match your polish
(all those dopuki and swierza, creeps!).

[Gość: Withnail]

... although others may also have a go at it. It took me some time to find it
but hope you'll enjoy it.

EXPRESSO
I left my heart in a wooden case
With chains and locks all around its base
I'm on my way to surgery
I'm as happy as a boy can be

I left my brain in a metal sieve
With cancer injected just to stop it live
I know where the angels sing
So play that harp and flap that wing

I'm going to Heaven, baby...

I left my eyes in candy box
Stuffed with cotton just to stop them rock
I skip along the corridor
I open up the theatre door

I left my blood in a plastic mug
I get a funny taste when I chug-a-lug
I know where the cherubs wait
So here I am, at St Peter's gate

I'm going to Heaven, baby...

I left my nose all stuck with glue
Tied with string up the chimney flue
I courtsy to doctor and nurse
I wave outside to the waiting hearse

And when I spoke to father's ghost
He said he died by parcel post
So halleluya, here I come
See you at Easter, mum...

Please, maintain all the rhymes and make the whole have some sense (I know,
Together that you're not a poet but I believe in you)

[magbak]

Who is this song 'expresso' by? Please forgive my stupidity.

to sisi (cc)

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Don't read it out, just read it. You must be some kind of fucking asshole.
Didn't you see a diclaimer at the end? Other than that you seem to be a nice
person. Have a good life.
To withnail. I really got pissed off when I saw what you did to
"I was beat incomplete
I'd been had, I was sad and blue" and
"Oh your love thawed out
Yeah, your love thawed out
What was scared and cold" that was a real abortion job.
No, I won't do it again. No more translations. Ain't gonna kick the bucket.

[Gość: Withnail]

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> To withnail. I really got pissed off when I saw what you did to
> "I was beat incomplete
> I'd been had, I was sad and blue" and
> "Oh your love thawed out
> Yeah, your love thawed out
> What was scared and cold" that was a real abortion job.
Funny, I would swear 'to thaw sth out' means 'roztopic'. Oh well, one learns
all one's life.

> No, I won't do it again. No more translations. Ain't gonna kick the bucket.
You're breaking my heart (by saying you won't translate it, of course, not by
that you're not willing to ahem... pass away).
So, anyone else wants to show their talents?

[Gość: cc]

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> You must be some kind of fucking asshole.
I see you've really done your best. Congratulations - keep using arguments like
that and everybody will apreciate your style and brilliance.
> Didn't you see a diclaimer at the end?
Did you mean a 'diSclaimer'? No, can't see any there. Anyway, are there more
than one (as your 'a' suggests)?
> Other than that you seem to be a nice person. Have a good life.
Another disclaimer or what?

[Gość: Withnail]

magbak napisała:

> Who is this song 'expresso' by? Please forgive my stupidity.

There's nothing to forgive - I myself don't know, I read it on some message
board a long time ago and it just struck me. Great, isn't it?

re:to sisi(cc)

[Gość: toogether]

my dear sisi boy cc. undoubtedly you must be a teacher. On top of it you are
THE ASSHOLE.God bless your students. It was mistype.
But if you are sooooooo fluent and cool why don't you translate EXPRESSO and
give me the opportunity to have some fun with you. It's a challange.
from Noo Yawk
two get her

[Gość: cc]

I am a girl, so the only asshole here is you.

[Gość: Wojtek]

Cc, dear, are you a teacher as 'together' suspects you yo be?

[Gość: together]

cc wrote:I am a girl, so the only asshole here is you.
I am very sorry. Please accept my apology. Therefore you are sisi girl.
I shall not permit myself to call you a girly name for asshole.
Ain't gonna do it. Ain't misbehavin' no more.

[Gość: together]

Open invitation to translate. Any takers?

HIGHWAY 61 REVISITED

Oh God said to Abraham, "Kill me a son"
Abe says, "Man, you must be puttin' me on"
God say, "No." Abe say, "What?"
God say, "You can do what you want Abe, but
The next time you see me comin' you better run"
Well Abe says, "Where do you want this killin' done?"
God says, "Out on Highway 61."

Well Georgia Sam he had a bloody nose
Welfare Department they wouldn't give him no clothes
He asked poor Howard where can I go
Howard said there's only one place I know
Sam said tell me quick man I got to run
0l' Howard just pointed with his gun
And said that way down on Highway 61.

Well Mack the Finger said to Louie the King
I got forty red white and blue shoe strings
And a thousand telephones that don't ring
Do you know where I can get rid of these things
And Louie the King said let me think for a minute son
And he said yes I think it can be easily done
Just take everything down to Highway 61.

Now the fifth daughter on the twelfth night
Told the first father that things weren't right
My complexion she said is much too white
He said come here and step into the light he says hmm you're right
Let me tell the second mother this has been done
But the second mother was with the seventh son
And they were both out on Highway 61.

Now the rovin' gambler he was very bored
He was tryin' to create a next world war
He found a promoter who nearly fell off the floor
He said I never engaged in this kind of thing before
But yes I think it can be very easily done
We'll just put some bleachers out in the sun
And have it on Highway 61.

[Gość: erwas]

Gość portalu: together napisał(a):

> Open invitation to translate. Any takers?
>
> HIGHWAY 61 REVISITED
>
> Oh God said to Abraham, "Kill me a son"

...no. sorry, can't be done.
for starters "Kill me a son" is untranslatable.

erwas

[Gość: dunno]

Withnail - my sincere congratulations! Very interesting interpretation. I had a
lot of fun.

[Gość: Withnail]

Gość portalu: dunno napisał(a):

> Withnail - my sincere congratulations! Very interesting interpretation. I had
a
>
> lot of fun.
>
You're making me blush ;-) thank you very much.

[Gość: Withnail]

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> Open invitation to translate. Any takers?
Now, that's a challenge (and no joking this time)

> HIGHWAY 61 REVISITED
>
> Oh God said to Abraham, "Kill me a son"
> Abe says, "Man, you must be puttin' me on"
> God say, "No." Abe say, "What?"
> God say, "You can do what you want Abe, but
> The next time you see me comin' you better run"
> Well Abe says, "Where do you want this killin' done?"
> God says, "Out on Highway 61."

Bog powiedzial do Abrahama "Zabij dla mnie syna swego"
Abe odpowiedzal "Chyba zartujesz, kolego"
Bog powiedzal "Nie". Abe pyta "Co?"
"Rob co chcesz, Abe" Bog mowi mu na to
"Ale kiedy zobaczysz, ze nadchodze uciekaj lepiej"
Abe -"No dobra, gdzie mam go zabic wedlug Ciebie?"
A Bog mowi "Na autostradzie 61"

Well, that's all I can do - I've got endless problems with pinning down the
references as far as American culture is concerned.

[Gość: erwas]

Gość portalu: Withnail napisał(a):

> Gość portalu: together napisał(a):
>
> > Open invitation to translate. Any takers?
> Now, that's a challenge (and no joking this time)
>
> > HIGHWAY 61 REVISITED
> >
> > Oh God said to Abraham, "Kill me a son"
> > Abe says, "Man, you must be puttin' me on"
> > God say, "No." Abe say, "What?"
> > God say, "You can do what you want Abe, but
> > The next time you see me comin' you better run"
> > Well Abe says, "Where do you want this killin' done?"
> > God says, "Out on Highway 61."
>
> Bog powiedzial do Abrahama "Zabij dla mnie syna swego"
> Abe odpowiedzal "Chyba zartujesz, kolego"
> Bog powiedzal "Nie". Abe pyta "Co?"
> "Rob co chcesz, Abe" Bog mowi mu na to
> "Ale kiedy zobaczysz, ze nadchodze uciekaj lepiej"
> Abe -"No dobra, gdzie mam go zabic wedlug Ciebie?"
> A Bog mowi "Na autostradzie 61"
>
> Well, that's all I can do - I've got endless problems with pinning down the
> references as far as American culture is concerned.

well done for even trying, this is hard.

starting with 'kill me "a" son'. this doesn't mean 'syna "swego"'.
later: "Abe says" "God say" sounds Afro-slangy, how do you find a Polish
equivalent? etc.

another hard part is the rythm. this piece has a very distinctive rythm.

PS "highway" isn't necessarily a freeway.

erwas

[Gość: dunno]

> Well Georgia Sam he had a bloody nose
> Welfare Department they wouldn't give him no clothes
> He asked poor Howard where can I go
> Howard said there's only one place I know
> Sam said tell me quick man I got to run
> 0l' Howard just pointed with his gun
> And said that way down on Highway 61.

Ach, ten George i jego pijackie wypieki!
Olewa go nawet Ministerstwo Opieki,
Więc o wskazówki pyta Howarda biednego,
A ten mówi o pójsciu do miejsca pewnego,
Na co Sam - Gdzież to zatem przełamię mą biede?
Więc stary Howard wskazał mu spluwa przed siebie
I rzekł - Tam, daleko na szosie 61.

> Well Mack the Finger said to Louie the King
> I got forty red white and blue shoe strings
> And a thousand telephones that don't ring
> Do you know where I can get rid of these things
> And Louie the King said let me think for a minute son
> And he said yes I think it can be easily done
> Just take everything down to Highway 61.

Mack Paluszek Louie'mu Królowi oznajmia swe wieści:
Trójkolorowych sznurówek mam par czterdzieści,
A tysiąca zepsutych telefonów nie mogę już pomieścić,
Zatem pytam cię, jak ulżyć mojej posiadania ich boleści?
Na co Louie po namyśle miał mu odpowiedzieć:
Spakuj wszystko na samochód, którym pojedziesz
Tam, gdzie to sprzedasz - na szosie 61.

> Now the fifth daughter on the twelfth night
> Told the first father that things weren't right
> My complexion she said is much too white
> He said come here and step into the light he says hmm you're right
> Let me tell the second mother this has been done
> But the second mother was with the seventh son
> And they were both out on Highway 61.

Piąta córka podczas zmierzchu dwunastego
- Coś jest nie tak - rzekła do ojca pierwszego -
Moja cera jest koloru zbyt białawego.
- Podejdź do światła... hmmm, zgadzam się co do tego.
Powiedzmy to drugiej matce, gdyż tego nie wie.
Ale druga matka była z synem numer siedem
Od dawna już na szosie 61.

> Now the rovin' gambler he was very bored
> He was tryin' to create a next world war
> He found a promoter who nearly fell off the floor
> He said I never engaged in this kind of thing before
> But yes I think it can be very easily done
> We'll just put some bleachers out in the sun
> And have it on Highway 61.

Pewien hazardzista dość tułaczką znudzony
Zapragnął spowodować wybuch kolejnej wojny.
Znalazł wspólnika, który jak piorunem rażony
Rzekł - Nie jestem zbytnio w tym doświadczony,
Ale jest na wojnę sposób pewien:
Wybielacze na nasłoniecznionej glebie,
Daj ich trochę koło szosy 61.

dunno.

[Gość: Withnail]

Dunno - this is really great, my congratulations.
Twogether - thnx, can I justify my ignorance about highways and freeways by
saying we've only got roads here?

[Gość: twogether]

Withnail, this is the outstanding job.
Erwas is right with respect to highway.
On the left coast there are freeways, on the right coast we have turnpikes,
thruways and parkways for "autostrada". The highway is for ordinary "szosa"

[Gość: feran]

Donno:good job;not only translator but a poetic soul too.