opis pokoju

[matka_chrzestna]

proszę o poprawienie błędów ;)
a temat był: Opisz miejsce, które znacznie zmieniło się w ciągu ostatnich
lat, przedstawiając jego wygląd w przeszłości i obecnie.

I like my room. It is like a part of me. This place was changed very much in
the last years. It always has changed along with me.

My room is in the attic. It is quite big and spatial. It is by far bigger
than peaces of my friends. This garret was all made by my dad. Every little
thing he did on his own.

Firstly there were white wallpapers and few posters of pop stars on the wall,
a gray carped on the floor and an awful large louvers in the windows on which
there was always accumulate a dust. I was very messy child, so on the floor
and desk you could found everything. For example toys, clean and dirty
clothes, empty and full glasses, plates and rubbishes. And what grated my
parents the most was that I never made the bad.

Each year my room look different when I was listened heavy metal room was all
black when I was enchanted by Madonna it was full of kitsch. Now it looks
really different. Walls are painted bright yellow, on the floor is brown
covering and in the window there are yellow shades. It is not messy no more
and the bed is always made. It is completely different place it looks like a
room of workaholic because on the walls I have ten maps of different parts of
the world and on the desk I have stack of books.

I love my room very much.

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what I like the most in my room is a radiator :P

[sloneczna.dziewczyna]

Usunełabym początek i koniec oraz dała inny. Tematem pracy nie było "Do you
like your room?," prawda?

[matka_chrzestna]

prawda ;)

trochę poprawiłam :)

[matka_chrzestna]

I like my room. It feels like a part of me. This place has changed very much in
the last years. It always has changed along with me.

My room is in the attic. It is quite big and spacious. It is by far bigger than
peaces of my friends. This garret was all made by my dad. Every little thing he
did on his own.

Firstly there were white wallpapers and few posters of pop stars on the wall, a
gray carpet on the floor and awful large louvers in the windows, on which there
was always accumulating dust. I was a very messy child, so on the floor and
desk you could find everything. For example toys, clean and dirty clothes,
empty and full glasses and rubbish. And what grated my parents the most was
that I never made the bed.

Each year my room looked different. When I was listening to heavy metal room
was all black. When I was enchanted by Madonna it was full of kitsch.

Now it looks really different. The walls are painted bright yellow. On the
floor is a brown covering and in the window there are yellow shades. It is not
messy anymore and the bed is always made. It is a completely different place.
It looks like the room of workaholic because on my walls I have ten maps of
different parts of the world, and on the desk I have stacks of books.

I love my room very much.

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matka_chrzestna napisała:

> I like my room. It feels like a part of me. This place has changed very much
in
>
> the last years. It always has changed along with me.
>

a great deal, a lot, an awful lot.

> My room is in the attic. It is quite big and spacious. It is by far bigger
than
>
> peaces of my friends.

!

There's no peace for the wicked.

> This garret was all made by my dad. Every little thing he
>
> did on his own.

Garret is more US, attic more UK. "all made" > " made entirely"

>
> Firstly there were white wallpapers and few posters of pop stars on the wall,
a
>

wallpaper is singular.
"few" != "a few".


> gray carpet on the floor and awful large louvers in the windows, on which
there
>
> was always accumulating dust.

"dust was always gathering"
UK grey. No idea what "louvers" are.


I was a very messy child, so on the floor and
> desk you could find everything.

just about anything.

> For example toys, clean and dirty clothes,
> empty and full glasses and rubbish. And what grated my parents the most

grated on them, or better, their nerves.

was
> that I never made the bed.
>
> Each year my room looked different. When I was listening to heavy metal room
> was all black. When I was enchanted by Madonna it was full of kitsch.

When I was a fan of heavy metal, the room ..
>
> Now it looks really different. The walls are painted bright yellow. On the
> floor

there

> is a brown covering

rug? carpet?

> and in the window there are yellow shades. It is not
> messy anymore and the bed is always made. It is a completely different place.
> It looks like the room of

a

> workaholic because on my walls I have ten maps of
> different parts of the world, and on the desk I have stacks of books.
>

US allows commas before 'and'. UK doesn't.

> I love my room very much.

I don't love your concluding sentence very much.

Sounds a bit prissy and trite. I would round off with a stronger ending.

How about:

"Who knows what it will look like in ten years' time? It will be interesting to
hang round and find out!"

hang round?

[matka_chrzestna]

ok dzieki za pomoc :)

louvers to są żaluzje :P

bardzo podoba mi sie zakończenie :)
ale co to znaczy hang round?