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[yoplait]

Kochani zalaczam essay i jesli mozecie rzucic na to okiem i wylapac bledy
gramatyczne, bylabym bardzo wdzeczna. Wiem, ze nie jest to krotki test, ale
jesli znacie dobrze angielski, chce wam sie pomoc to...bede bardzo wdzieczna.

Ania

Z My intellectual interests are focused on recognizing and searching the
nature of life. The physical world - human beings, a biological and physical
environment is involved in a process that had been started years ago and
will be continued forever

The real lesson I have received from my personal experience is that measure
of my knowledge is the measure of my freedom. Any kind of freedom, including
the most precious, intellectual one, cooperates with the knowledge. In my
opinion the freedom is defined not by what we can do, but what we cannot do.
Being aware of this fact had caused my migration from Poland to USA. In spite
of the fact I was (and I sill am) very proud of being Polish I knew all of
the limits in economic and political situation in Poland. Beside the fact
that Polish society is totally unprepared for expansion of well-educated
women, even very young, but especially in their 30s and 40s. Knowing my
personal potential and my desire for learning more and more I did not want to
follow any stereotypes. I had a choice and I made one.
The limits are definition of the freedom. My research of the nature of the
life is based on recognizing, understanding and if it possible stretching
these limits. I made the first step and begun a new life in a new country.
The next step was the idea of stretching those limits which become the
leading idea of a Polish school that was founded by me for a very few
students including two of my children. I teach them not only the Polish and
European history and geography, but also a desire and passion for knowledge.
The great experience of my life comes from my Alma Mater- ………... Even before
I had incredible luck to graduate from the high school in Poland where I had
been enrolled in bio-chemistry profile. This was the time where my admiration
of biology had taken place. The theory I connected with practice working
through all high school, in the hospital. That job, organized by special
organizations OHP, was designed for young people preparing them for medical
schools. These all experiences prepared me for stretching the limits of my
abilities. It helped me with decision to continue my education in US at ……
College and with applying for master degree program at …….. College.
My future aspiration are focused on received the best education I possible
can received. I believe that ……… College is the best place for me and I am
the best candidate for this College. As a well educated woman I am able to
serve as a model role for my children and for a polish community where I live
in. I could be an example for many immigrants from Poland showing that a
desire for education is the best way to adopt in a new environment. I know
from my personal experience that the first generation of Polish immigrant
always thinks about their children never about themselves. I wish I could
participate in changing that. Living here, in USA, I would like to take a
chance to challenge myself and stretch my limits as much as I can.


gory dzieki

[mizzmarymary]

Ania,
I edited your paper. I wasn't sure about your meaning in some places so I was unsure of what to do. I
have made those comments in bold. Your paper is a little disorganized. Hmmm...you start talking
about your intellectual interests, then move to freedom, then to limits and then starting a school. You
talk about limitations in Poland but you don't really expand that idea. It actually needs a lot of work,
but in terms of what you have, grammatically, it's ok. :))
Mary

PS: I did spell check but if I missed anything, I apologize.


My intellectual interests are focused on recognizing and searching the nature of life. [The physical
world - human beings, a biological and physical
environment is involved in a process that had been started years ago and
will be continued forever]>>MAKES NO SENSE. DO YOU MEAN THAT HUMAN BEINGS ARE PART OF THE
BIOLOGICAL AND PHYSICAL WORLD THAT STARTED MILLIONS OF YEARS AGO AND WILL CONTINUE
FOREVER? HMMMM?.

The real lessons I have learned from my personal experiences are that the measure of my knowledge is
the measure of my freedom. Intellectual freedom, the most precious of all, is intimately connected to
knowledge.

In my opinion, freedom is defined not by what we can do, but by what we cannot do. It is because of
this belief that I decided to leave Poland and immigrate to United States. In spite of this fact, I am
deeply proud of being Polish. The economic and political limitations, which are present in Poland, are
particularly harmful to women and impact their lives in a negative way. The Polish society is totally
unprepared for the growth and development of women. This includes all women, but especially those
in their 30s and 40s.

Knowing my personal potential and my desire for learning more and more I did not want to follow any
stereotypes. I had a choice and I made one. The limits of what I am able to do in my life (DESCRIBE
WHAT IT IS YOU WANT TO DO IN YOUR LIFE-WHAT YOU CAN DO IN TH US BUT YOU CAN?T DO IN
POLAND) are defined by the amount of freedom I have. My research of the nature of life is based on
recognizing, understanding and if it possible stretching these (WHAT ARE YOU REFERRING TO WHEN
YOU SAY ?THESE?) limits.

I made the first step and began a new life in a new country. The next step was the idea of stretching
those limits(YOU HAVEN?T REALLY DEFINED ?LIMITS? IS SO THIS IS VAGUE) which was to open a school
that merged the best qualities of Polish and American schools. The school began with a few students
including my two children. They were taught Polish, European history and geography. In each course,
it was my desire to engage students in such a way that they would also develop a desire and passion
for knowledge.

I had incredible luck to graduate from a high school in Poland where I had been enrolled in
biochemistry profile. It was during this point in my education that my admiration and love of biology
developed. I was able to connect the theory I was learning in school with the application I required
working in a hospital. This job was organized by OHP(WHAT DOES THIS ACRONYM STAND FOR?}, and
was designed for young people preparing for medical school. All of these experiences prepared me for
stretching the limits of my abilities. It helped me with decision to continue my education in the US at
?? college and applying for master degree program there.
My future aspirations are focused on receiving the best education I possibly can. I believe that ???
college is the best place for me and I am the best candidate for this college. As a well-educated
woman, I believe I am a role model for my children and for the polish community where I live.

I feel I can be a positive example for the many immigrants who arrive from Poland showing them that a
desire for education is the best way to thrive and find success in their new environment. I know from
my personal experiences that the first generation of Polish immigrants arriving in the US will think only
about their children and not about themselves. I wish I could participate in changing that. Living here,
in USA, I would like to take a chance to challenge myself and stretch my limits as much as I can.

[felusiak1]

"My intellectual interests are focused on recognizing and searching the nature of life." Really?

how about - My interests or I'm primarily focused on various aspect of the nature of life

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