opis / miejszcze zagrożone

[matka_chrzestna]

Cześć :)
Prosze o sprawdzenie mojego opisu ;)
A temat był:
Nieustannie postępuje degradacja środowiska naturalnego. Opisz miejsce, które
jest szczególnie zagrożone.
Dzieki za pomoc
Pozdrawiam :)

As a result of the degradation of the environment particularly threatened
places are equatorial forests. This forests are important for everyone
because its supply the atmosphere with oxygen, and we use this gas in
breathing process. So if there is no oxygen there is no live.

The most know equatorial forests are in Brazil on the Amazon river. In hot
clime where rainfalls are very often, live a lot of beautiful, various
animals and inimitable, unique plants but their space of their occurrence is
getting smaller.

Brazil is a poor country and it wants to develop. So as a result governments
do not look after environment, they only want to reach greater profits and
financial incomes. They cut trees in order to have place to build new
factories and employing establishment. They also have less restrictive
regulations than other developed countries so that concerns want to invest
there.

In this developing industry region due to degradation of environment suffer
everyone. Air is polluted by car and factory fumes, water by sewage and soil
by destructive wastes. Animals are deprived their natural habitat which is
their home.

Few years ago this place was full of life and now it is only another
industrial estate. Everything for human stupidity without limit. We should
think about our grandchildren. Will they want to live in so polluted and sad
earth?

Tak na bardzo szybko

[kicior99]

> As a result of the degradation of the environment particularly threatened
> places are equatorial forests.

Nie podoba mi sie szyk. W angielskim przewaza N+V+Pred

> places are equatorial forests. This forests
these forests

> because its supply the atmosphere with oxygen

they supply. Kongruencja przede wszystkim

> The most know equatorial forests
known

> clime where rainfalls are very often
frequent

> animals and inimitable, unique
pomin inimitable, uzywa sie go raczej w znaczeniu "niedoscigniony", "nie do podrobienia"

> (snip...) but their space of their occurrence
space of occurrence,

> do not look after environment,
look after bardziej pasuje do ludzi. Dalbym care about

> (snip...), they only want to reach greater profits
they want only - dobrze bedzie tu uzys slowa strive

> financial incomes. They cut trees in order to have place to build new
to get place, to gain place

> factories and employing establishment. They also have less restrictive
> regulations than other developed countries

The regulations in B. are less restrictive - brzmi lepiej i mniej po polsku

> (snip...) so that concerns want to invest there.
Strasznie to brzmi.

in order to encourage others to invest there - to chyba chcialas powiedziec

> In this developing industry region due to degradation of environment suffer
> everyone.

Everyone suffers in this (...) due to (...)

> by destructive wastes. Animals are deprived their natural habitat
deprived of

> (snip...) Animals are deprived their natural habitat which is
> their home.
ostatnie 4 wyrazy zbedne.

[matka_chrzestna]

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